本文为原作者成功申请到美国常春藤大学之一的哥伦比亚大学的Essay范文，Essay短文题材为challenges，含专业点评与分析，作者为SuzanneArrington。ColumbiaUniversityUndergraduateApplicationEssay："PowerofPeople"IBELIEVEINPEOPLE.THISCONVICTIONdrivesmyactionandambitions,anddefinesmeinaworldofcynicismanddoubt.Ihaveseenthepowerofpeopleandtheirabilitytocometogetherintimesofneedandjoyandsorrow.Iknowthatultimately,humansstriveforbelongingandcommunity;thus,whilelonelinessandangermayalwaysbeinexistence,sowillbetogethernessandbliss.MystrongfaithinhumanitystemsfrommywitnessingofthebestinhumanqualitieswhiledoingtheMS150andduringHurricaneIke,andpushesmetopursueacareerinhelpingothers.Bothoftheseeventshaveallowedmetoseehumanityatitsbest,performingselflessactsofbenevolence.Forthepastfouryears,IhaveparticipatedintheBPMS150biketourfromHoustontoAustin.This175milerideraisesfundsforthenationalMSSociety,whichsponsorsmedicalresearchformultiplesclerosisandaidsthefamiliesofitsvictims.Icansayfromexperience,therideisgrueling;enormoushills,headwinds,fatigue,andbodyachesareprevalentthroughout.Yeteveryyear,overthirteenthousandridersdecidetoputtheirmindsandbodiesthroughtwodaysoftorturesothattheycanhelpthosewholivewithiteveryday.Ihaveraised,overfouryears,morethaneightthousanddollarstobenefittheMSSociety,andhaveneverregrettedanyofthepainfultrainingortherideitself.TheviewatthestartinglineisoneofthemostempoweringIhaveeverwitnessed:thousandsofpeople,allofthemwiththeirhandsontheirhandlebars,onefootpoisedonapedal.Allarereadytoexperienceexhaustionforthebenefitofothers,likemyfather.HewasdiagnosedwithMSwhenIwasfour,andisaconstantmotivatorforme.Iwitnessedhimbecomeblindinoneeye,andstrugglewithabodythatrefusestofunctionnormally.Iparticipateinthisrideeveryyearforhim,asdothirteenthousandothers.Thepowerofpeoplewillultimatelyhelpmyfathertoreceivebettermedicaltreatment,andmaybeevenoneday,becured.Whilewritingthisessay,Iwasalsoabletoobserveandbeapartofamazinghumanefforts.HurricaneIkedevastatedSoutheasternTexas,particularlytheHoustonandGalvestonareas.MuchofmyextendedfamilylivesinGalveston,andsowasforcedtoevacuate.Withouthesitation,myparentsopenedupourhometoaunts,uncles,grandparents,cousins,andpets.ThisistheenvironmentinwhichIhavealwayslived;ourhomeisanyone'sshelter,ourfoodisanyone'snourishment.Together,ourentirefamilyweatheredthestorm,andcomfortedoneanother.Myaunt'shomereceivedelectricalpowerpriortomyhome,andsosheeagerlywelcomedustostaywithher.www.liuxue.lalargescaledisplaysofaltruismcouldbeseeninthehundredsofUniversityofHoustonstudentshandingoutfoodandwatertothoseaffectedbythehurricane.Duringtimesofneed,peoplebandtogetherforsafetyandsolace.Communityisinstinctual;dismissthenotionsofsurvivalofthefittest.Peopletrulydesireclosenesswithoneanother.Inthefuture,Ihopetopursueacareerinpublichealth.Ilovestudyingscienceandmath,andIwouldliketousethispassiontobenefitlargenumbersofpeople.Manygowithoutbasicmedicaltreatment,andthiscausesahugediscrepancyinqualityoflifeandhealthinthepopulation.Evenifthisproblemcannevercompletelybesolved,Iwanttohelpremedythisasmuchaspossible.Withsmalldeedsandcooperativeeffort,humanscanaccomplishimmensegood.IknowthisbecauseIbelieveinpeople,andIhaveseenthemattheirfinest.下面就是对Suzanne的这篇申请哥伦比亚大学的优秀Essay的点评与分析AnalysisSuzannebeginsheressaywithafour-wordsentencethatispowerfulforitssimplicityandfrank...